Acknowledgement

This is my submission for the July 27, 2012 #FridayFictioneers; critiques welcome.  The submissions are posted here, please read them.

The prompt picture:

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Picture is copyrighted, Contact Madison Woods.

Acknowledgement

It had not rained for weeks; drinkable water was becoming scarcer, and the small outside water tank stood forsaken.  Not that drought was an unusual occurrence, but this time it was different.  The well had become polluted, and the house water tank was low.  Sure, the tanker would bring some water; sure the stream would still flow, yet shallow; but even with self-imposed restrictions, you had to respect the drought.  Respect its presence, respect its power; respect the fact that nature has strength that man can not truly bridle.  Looking at the tank, he acknowledged the natural balance of life.

(Copyright, Steven S. Walsky, 2012, all rights reserved.)

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21 thoughts on “Acknowledgement

  1. We as people tend to feel that so much is under our control but, as you so aptly point out, there’s so much that isn’t. Respecting nature is much like respecting a strong opponent and one whose moves you can’t always predict. You expressed this well.

  2. I enjoyed this piece a lot. i think respect for nature is very important and we certainly take it for granted. If I can make one comment, I think you went one sentence too far (something I do a lot) because I think that “Respect its presence, respect its power; respect the fact that nature has strength that man can not truly bridle” is a very strong sentence.

    • Thank you for your read and comment. I added the last sentence to link the picture to the narrative via a ‘real’ person, vice a ‘thought’; however, the preceding sentence would have been a strong ending.

  3. Very carefully done in form. There was some inconsistency in voice/language choice that you could address to improve flow/feeling. “Respect its presence, respect its power; respect the fact that nature has strength that man can not truly bridle.” seems to be your main message/drive home statement. The forceful, formal speech here is at odds with “sure” (generally used in a more casual setting). The piece would be much stronger if you removed the word, but you could also improve it by choosing a different word (“yes” would work) to replace it.

    I was curious as to why they had both a well and a water tank. Is this common? (when we needed water, the tanker pumped it straight into our well).

    How did the well get polluted? (Very curious about this since the stream still seems okay.)

    Cheers,

    plowright.wordpress.com

    • Thank you for your comment. As I was writing, I thought about a farm where water from the now ‘closed off’ well was pumped into a holding tank in the house. While their ground water supply had not been polluted, there was always the possibility; natural occurrences and manmade. Thus, you would have to disconnect from the ground water, drain the tank, clean it, and use purchased water.

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